An Oldie

The short story below hasn't been edited. So don't get on my ass if a comma is out of place or something, geesh.

Snow

By Saw

            Within the sky, there were grey clouds where water vapors were gathering. It was well into wintertime, which suggests that those water vapors will eventually fall as white flakes of snow. Looking up, it seems as if the tension of the incoming snow is becoming unbearable. If the clouds could speak, it would be screaming I’M ABOUT TO BLOW MY LOAD OUT!

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            Two girls walk among the frozen wasteland of their apartment parking complex. If they weren’t wrapped in layers of clothes, one wouldn’t notice that it was wintertime for it was bleak and grey within the parking lot year around. And Dull. Let’s not forgot that, for the girls are merely walking around within the harsh and dry wind for nothing. Yet, the girls drudged on, seeking for a source of amusement.

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            Two bare women are kneeling on the carpet, gasping. Soon, they will be done for the day. All that is left is the snow. Waiting, they looked up as Cloud became tenser with each stroke. SOON, screamed Cloud, IT’S COMING!

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            Finally, enough water vapors had built up. The load was far too heavy to remain within the sky and it must come down. With a gentle stream of breeze, white bits came floating down to the dreadful ground, snowing till the surface was completely covered and then the cloud would move on and dissolve.

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            Snow covered the two shocked women. Much as children would do during snow, they caught the flakes within their mouth. They gasped. They moaned, as they waited for the snow to stop steaming down. Once Cloud has been exhausted, the women turned toward each other and leaned into each other

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            Snowball. Building up, getting larger and larger as the two girls pushed it farther. Then, the girls left it and rolled another snowball, smaller than the previous one. And again. With a grunt, they sacked three snowballs on top of each other, with the largest on the bottom. With a furry of hands around the topmost ball, they gave the white ball a face. It was now a snowman with a goofy grin, gazing upon the giggling girls with its coal eyes.